Open Question: rate my rap lyrics 1-10 please?

03/03/10

knifes inserted the life is ending
all the horror and pain are out sending
im a new man no longer old me
im jay get used to it , thats who i be
im out on my mission just wanna be heard
get myself out of remission put the keys in the ignition
drive to the futrue away from the past
and if i cud change it , a great spell i would cast
underdog , allways under appreciated
unloved feel like my hearts bein discineragrated
debating? the 2 colors be segregrating
just want peace no more beef , hand in hand
one sound one band,
wanna stand out be like no other
acachol in the blood i begin to studder
peace to all my people on earth youse all my brothers
secluded, shy , insecure
noo punchlines i spit it only raw
nowadays its all the same shit , money cars hoes
i say real shit , unity peace friends and foes

i kick it old school , try to remeber the old times
glory years , when movies where only a few dimez
now were in a recession causing mass depression
the worlds coming to an end no1 seems to be regretting
its all our faults no1 else to blame
we blame others so much we put ourselves to shame
we diss eachother just to get a glance at fame
but it only lasts a few seconds , then we come back to earth
and our mothers be smiling down on us like the day of our birth
peoples fighting wars igniting , we see it happen and we aint to frigtened
death tolls add up everyday , it aint good
if i cud chnage the world , i wish i could
people with no food no home
they got no were to go they constantly roam
we gotta be a family again
what wud jesus do if he began to descend

this is how i express my feeling on paper
sorrow tears turn to vapor
im on my own team aint signing no waiver
we hear the devil, he speaks our language
not english , he speaks destruction and anguish
haunted by temptation, wondering why we were put into creation
too many people dying. diseases still airborne flying
not enough food, babies crying
thats wen we help eachother. turn to one big body
they begin to follow one by one , illuminati
government officials aint saying the truth
dont trust that man just because hes wearing a suit
this life we living it aint fun , we just sit at night waiting for the morning sun
the battle agaisnt oursleves. itlll never be won
just leave the battlefield with hands held high
chyll out take a knee and point to the sky
thank all the men from before that all died
cuz up in the heavens were all on the same side.